On The Other Side Of The Wringer

[bloodyrosemccoy]

Well, back from the grueling First Story Critique!

 

It went pretty well. A lot of the criticism was good stuff on things I can fix, the overall impression was positive, I have been told I don’t need the italics (FUCK YEAH.  I hate big damn blocks of italics, but I didn’t know if it was strong enough without it), and one of them even gave me a magazine that contains a story he wrote (haven’t read it yet) that is “the antithesis of yours.”  Dammit, once again I am the accidental plagiarist!*

 

In fact, the only part I reacted badly to was when one dude blithely informed me that the conlang terms I used in there did not seem like part of the same language.  This was Rredrra we were talking about, though. Rredrra has a full sound system, grammar, and naming system in place, and a steadily growing lexicon. I am proud of Rredrra. Bitch, you insult my conlang and IT IS ON.**

 

He may have saved himself, though, since he did point out that I don’t mention any of the nonsentient hive minds on The Hive’s planet—something of a gross oversight if you want to get a believable world. I will put them in, if obliquely.

 

Anyway, overall good. I’m still not sure if I want to submit the Doctors! yet, since I think I want to get a whole book done before that. But it’s a start.

 

 

*At least he’s not Poul Anderson. 

**Of course, then he told me that Faruq is not a human name.  I will get right on drafting a letter to anyone who speaks an Arabic language.

Comments

[padparadscha.livejournal.com]

Well, sure! I had an early version here, but I submitted a later draft to the group, and now I'm reworking it again. I can e-mail you the draft I gave them, or I can send it after I rework it. I don't want to make YOU have to read it thirty times ...